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[Yourialexeievitchgagarine]

Bonjour et bonne année !

Je dois faire une présentation orale en anglais sur la chanson "Pride" du groupe U2 et sur le groupe.

Auriez-vous la gentillesse de corriger ce début de texte ?

Je vous remercie beaucoup!

Voilà le début de mon travail:

Today, I'm going to speak about the song "Pride" from U2 

U2 is an Irish rock band from Dublin the capital of Ireland. The band was formed in 1976 when the members were teenagers. The band had several member changes before becoming in 1978 the current band we know. 

The members of the band are: Paul David Hewson, David Howell Evans, Adam Clayton and Larry Mullen Junior.

I am going to give you some information about them.

Paul David Hewson. He is the lead vocalist. He also plays guitar. His stage name is Bono, The name Bono was a type of hearing aid. It means good voice in Latin. 

Bono was born on 10 May 1960. He married Alison Stewart, he met at school. Alison became an Irish activist and businesswoman. The couple have four children together. Bono is known for doing a lot of charity work and social action. For this, he was named Time Person of the Year in 2005. 

Another member of the band is David Howell Evans well known as “the Edge”. He is the guitarist, the backing vocalist and the keyboardist of the band. He was born on 8 August 1961. He received piano and guitar lessons with his brother, Dik Evans. At first, Dik was another member of the band but he got out of it.

Adam Clayton is the third member. He is the bassist for the band. He was born on 13 March 1960. He started playing guitar when he was teenager. He joined the other members of the future U2 band at the same time.

The last member of the band is Larry Mullen Junior. He was born on 31 October 1961. He is the drummer of the band. Besides U2, Larry has worked with other musicians, for example B.B. King, a famous American blues guitarist and singer who died in 2015. 

All the members of U2 are still alive and active. The band has produced more than 200 songs, sold over 200 million albums and won numerous awards, including 22 Grammys. Their first album, Boy, was released in 1980. 

The style of U2 takes influence from artists like “The Beatles” or “The Who”. 

Some famous artists and bands such as “One Republic” or “Coldplay” said that they have been influenced by the work of the Irish band.

The band worked with artists like Bob Dylan, Green Day or Bruce Springsteen.

The band is also known for their fight against AIDS and extreme poverty in Africa. Moreover they are against violence and terrorism and in favor of a peaceful solution to the conflict. Finally it's interesting to know that three of the members are deeply Christian and many of the songs have an implicit or explicit Christian message.

THANK YOU !

 

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Today, I'm going to speak about the song "Pride" from U2 

U2 is an Irish rock band from Dublin the capital of Ireland. The band was formed in 1976 when the members were teenagers. The band had several member changes before becoming in 1978 the current band we know. 

The members of the band are : Paul David Hewson, David Howell Evans, Adam Clayton and Larry Mullen Junior.

I am going to give you some information about them.

Paul David Hewson. He is the lead vocalist. He also plays guitar. His stage name is Bono, The name Bono was a type of hearing aid. It means good voice in Latin. 

Bono was born on 10 May 1960. He married Alison Stewart, he met at school. Alison became an Irish activist and businesswoman. The couple have four children together. Bono is known for doing a lot of charity work and social action. For this, he was named Time Person of the Year in 2005. 

Another member of the band is David Howell Evans well known as “the Edge”. He is the guitarist, the backing vocalist and the keyboardist of the band. He was born on 8 August 1961. He received piano and guitar lessons with his brother, Dik Evans. At first, Dik was another member of the band but he got out of it.

Adam Clayton is the third member. He is the bassist for the band. He was born on 13 March 1960. He started playing guitar when he was a teenager. He joined the other members of the future U2 band at the same time.

The last member of the band is Larry Mullen Junior. He was born on 31 October 1961. He is the drummer of the band. Besides U2, Larry has worked with other musicians, for example B.B. King, a famous American blues guitarist and singer who died in 2015. 

All the members of U2 are still alive and active. The band has produced more than 200 songs, sold over 200 million albums and won numerous awards, including 22 Grammys. Their first album, Boy, was released in 1980. 

The style of U2 takes influence from artists like “The Beatles” or “The Who”. 

Some famous artists and bands such as “One Republic” or “Coldplay” said that they have been influenced by the work of the Irish band.

The band worked with artists like Bob Dylan, Green Day or Bruce Springsteen.

The band is also known for their fight against AIDS and extreme poverty in Africa. Moreover they are against violence and terrorism and in favor of a peaceful solution to the conflict. Finally it's interesting to know that three of the members are deeply Christian and many of the songs have an implicit or explicit Christian message.

THANK YOU !

Mon seul commentaire : j'ignore à quel niveau de classe et à quel groupe d'âge correspond la Quatrième en Suisse mais quoi qu'il en soit, si tu as vraiment pondu ce texte tout seul, alors je te tire mon chapeau et te salue bien bas.

Tu n'as nul besoin d'aide extérieure.

[Yourialexeievitchgagarine]

Merci beaucoup JRB pour tout !😃

Pour ma classe, je ne sais pas à quoi cela correspond en France (j'ai 15 ans).

Malheureusement mon niveau d'anglais n'est pas aussi bon qu'il n'y paraît. Je dois faire pas mal de recherches (vocabulaire, grammaire) pour arriver à faire un texte correct.

Et quand je commence à prendre un peu trop d'assurance, c'est parfois une catastrophe.😁

En tous les cas encore un grand merci. 😀

Je vous souhaite une très belle soirée !