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[Ranio]

Bonjour à tous je devais normalement avoir de l'aide avec mon professeur d'anglais sur ce travail mais on ne peut plus,  alors si vous pourriez me corriger ce texte et me dire ce qui va ou pas merci beaucoup

voici le texte :

And then there's google ;  did you know that  before google used to be a simple internet search engine , but now it’s a famous world wide company, which created google earth ; that uses train planes automobiles to take pictures of the world. They mix them to create images. It's  an application, which there is a map of the world, (the tool) it used to search places ansd we can see the world. This an app use all around the world to have news of the world.If you want to go soewhere google maps can help your way easily. On the one hand, it’s a good thing ; moreover everybody have phones today to use it. And if you are too poor to travel all around the world you can travel by google street views free, But on the other hand many people are nervous because google earth takes photos of your house. Criminals can use them to burgle your home, you can check on the world behind your desk. In my opinion Google is too powerful, google ot’s excluding its competitor websites, they stole  informations, so i think google earth can be a good thing when it used correctly.

 

Secondly, today there is a series of websites and applications that allows people to share informations, ideas, opinions, interrests everyday lije , photos and videos. The way we interact with people changing faster than we can imagine, people are loosing contact with other people ; the average person spends 4 years of their life on their phone. Social media wensite  maybe are making us more social because it allows us to keep contact with your friends , maybe less because you are more involved with your phone, we loose contacts. People prefer sending messages. Social media has positive and negative aspects it depends on  how we decide to use it.

 

And finally , there's the fake news, did you know that  25°/° of high school students are no able to tell the difference between real and true, people believe fake news because they think internet doesn’t lie, people publish what they want. For example one day, a gunman went into a pizza restaurant and he shot because he thought Hillary Clinton was the head of a child abuse ring in this restaurant ; all of this happened because he read a fake news story in the social networks and he believed it. Before itw as difficult to spread fake news because newspaper were regulated but now with social media it’s more easy.

To sum up in my opinion the web can have a good or a bad influence on today’s society it depends how we use it. When you use Social merdia for exampke to keep contact with people who are very far from you it’s positive for you. But in a society where everyone is using their phone it’s bad thig because we no longer benefit of people next to us. After, fake ews can have a bad influence on the society because we belive it so we must verify the source of the information. Finally we can decide to use web in the rifht way to limit their negative aspets in the society.

Merci

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

Si, comme c'est très probable pour ne pas écrire certain, le problème que tu sais dure dans le temps, il faudra sans doute envisager le travail à domicile par l'Internet.

Tes professeurs sont probablement déjà en train d'y travailler.

Le 15/03/2020 à 18:20, Ranio a dit :

Bonjour à tous je devais normalement avoir de l'aide avec mon professeur d'anglais sur ce travail mais on ne peut plus,  alors si vous pourrviez me corriger ce texte et me dire ce qui va ou pas merci beaucoup

voici le texte :

And then there's Google.  Did you know that before Google used to be a simple Internet search engine, but now it’s a famous world wide company which created  Google Earth that uses train drivers, plane pilots and automobile drivers use to take pictures of the world. <Jamais d'inversion sujet-verbe en anglais mais >> le sujet toujours devant le verbe They mix them to create images. It's  an application which there is displays a map of the world, (the tool) it is used to search places ansd so that <(= si bien que) we can see the world. This an app is used all around the world to have news of the world. If you want to go somewhere, google maps can help find your way easily. On the one hand, it’s a good thing ; moreover everybody have has a phone today to use it. And if you are too poor to travel all around the world you can travel by google street views freely. But on the other hand many people are nervous because google earth takes photos of your house. Criminals can use them to burgle your home, you can check on the world behind your desk. In my opinion Google is too powerful, google ot’s is excluding its website competitors, (1) they stole  informations, so I think google earth can be a good thing when it is used (2) correctly.

(1) Dans un nom composé de nom + nom, celui des 2 qui prend valeur d'adjectif et qualifie donc l'autre se place logiquement devant.

(2) La forme passive se compose toujours de l'auxiliaire be conjugué au temps voulu suivi du participe passé du verbe. Par 2 fois au moins, tu as oublié l'auxiliaire.

Secondly, today there is a series of websites and applications that allows < Le sujet est pluriel => pas de -s au verbe people to share informations, ideas, opinions, interests in everyday life, photos and videos. The way we interact with people changing faster than we can imagine, people are loosing contact with other people ; the average person spends 4 years of their life on their phone. Social media websites  maybe are making us more social because it they allows us to keep contact with your friends, maybe less because you are  being more involved with your phone we loose contacts. People prefer sending messages. Social media has positive and negative aspects it depends on  how we decide to use it.

And finally , there's the fake news. Did you know that  25°/° of high school students are no unable to tell the difference between real and true false, people believe fake news because they think the Internet (1)  doesn’t lie, people publish what they want. For example one day a gunman went into a pizza restaurant and he shot because he thought Hillary Clinton was the head of a child abuse ring in this restaurant ; all of this happened because he read a fake news story in the social networks and he believed it. Before it was difficult to spread fake news because newspapers were regulated but now with social media it’s more easy easier. <Le comparatif de supériorité d'un adjectif court se fait en y ajoutant le suffixe -(e)r.

(1) Toujours écrire the Internet avec l'article défini et le I majuscule car, vu qu'il n'en existe qu'un seul, il est forcément défini. C'est à mémoriser.

To sum up in my opinion the web can have a good or a bad influence on today’s society. Nouvelle phrase> It depends on how we use it. When you use Social media <( ? ) for example to keep contact with people who are very far from you it’s positive for you. But in a society where everyone is using their phone it’s a bad thing because we no longer benefit of from people next to us. After, fake ews can have a bad influence on the society because we believe it so we must verify the source of the information. Finally we can decide to use the web in the right way to limit their negative aspects in on the society.

Merci

Remarques :

 Sans grand risque de me tromper, je pense que tu as écrit tout ça en français d'abord pour le "traduire" ensuite en anglais. Si c'est bien le cas, abandonne cette méthode tout de suite, ne serait-ce que pour la simple raison suivante : le jour du Bac tu n'auras pas le temps d'écrire les deux versions.

C'est en effet une mauvaise méthode que j'ai dénoncée maintes fois sur ce site. Mieux vaut et de loin écrire directement en anglais en privilégiant des phrases simples, au moins dans un premier temps. Pour se lancer ensuite dans des phrases complexes, il faut maîtriser d'abord les premières.

Ensuite j'ai remarqué un certain nombre de fautes de frappe qui sont certes excusables si tu tapes aussi vite qu'une dactylo professionnelle ? mais là encore prends l'habitude de te relire attentivement, impitoyablement pour relever et corriger ce type de fautes.

Quand on est membre d'un jury du Bac, c'est un détail qui compte, crois moi.

Bonne continuation.

 

[Ranio]

Bonjour, merci  pour votre correction ça m'a beaucoup servi est-ce que vous pourriez jeter un coup d'œil à cette biography pour les éventuelles erreurs ? 

Merci ;

William Shakespeare.

William Shakespeare is still famous today  because he was, and still is,  one of the best known writers in the English language. Shakespeare was born in Stratford-upon-Avon, England. He got married at 18 and had children (Hamnet, Shakespeare’s only son, died 11 years later). And then, Shakespeare moved to London, and became a rather famous actor there. He also wrote plays which everyone, rich and poor, even royalty, paid to watch. Then, Shakespeare was rich enough to help build a new theatre, called ‘The Globe’ in 1599 (The King's Men). Shakespeare wrote many different types of plays, for example with :  Sad tragedies like Romeo and Juliet in 1597 (or Macbeth and Hamlet) , funny comedies like A Midsummer Night's Dream and important histories about kings like Henry V.

He also wrote poetry and invented new words like « assassination », or « bedroom ». He truly changed the way we speak English. Shakespeare is one of the most influential English-language writers, and he is estimated to have contributed over 2,700 words to the language. His works consist of some 38 plays, 154 sonnets and several other poems(over 158 poems) His plays have been translated into every major modern language, and his plays have been performed more than any other playwright in history. Shakespeare died in Stratford-on-Avon on April 23, 1616, but his name, plays and poetry are still known all over the world today. Students learn about him at school and at university. People come from many countries to see where he lived and his plays are just as popular now as when they were first performed all those years ago. Today, Shakespeare’s plays are performed all over the world.  Teachers in most English countries have been teaching his plays to students in their classrooms for a long time.  They have also been made into many movies throughout the years.  It seems Shakespeare’s reputation as a great writer will live on forever.

 

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

William Shakespeare.

William Shakespeare is still famous today  because he was, and still is,  one of the best known writers in the English language. Shakespeare was born in Stratford-upon-Avon, England. He got married at 18 and had children (Hamnet, Shakespeare’s only son, died 11 years later). And then, Shakespeare moved to London and became a rather famous actor there. He also wrote plays which everyone, rich and poor, even royalty, paid to watch. Then, Shakespeare was rich enough to help build a new theatre, called ‘The Globe’ in 1599 (The King's Men). Shakespeare wrote many different types of plays, for example with : sad tragedies like Romeo and Juliet in 1597 (or Macbeth and Hamlet) , funny comedies like A Midsummer Night's Dream and important histories about kings like Henry V.

He also wrote poetry and invented new words like « assassination », or « bedroom ». He truly changed the way we speak English. Shakespeare is one of the most influential English-language writers and he is estimated to have contributed over 2,700 words to the language. His works consist of some 38 plays, 154 sonnets and several other poems(over 158 poems) His plays have been translated into every major modern language and his plays they have been performed more than any other playwright's in history. Shakespeare died in Stratford-on-Avon on April 23, 1616, but his name, plays and poetry are still known all over the world today. Students learn about him at school and at university. People come from many countries to see where he lived and his plays are just as popular now as when they were first performed all those years ago. Today, Shakespeare’s plays are performed all over the world.  Teachers in most English countries have been teaching his plays to students in their classrooms for a long time.  They have also been made into many movies throughout the years.  It seems Shakespeare’s reputation as a great writer will live on forever.

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[Ranio]

Merci de votre correction et j'ai une question : est ce qu'on dit : he married Anne Hathaway. ou he got married with Anne Hathaway ? 

Voir divers emplois et exemples ci-dessous.

[Jean B]

@> marry [sb] verbe transitif = épouser qqn/se marier avec qqn :

>> She married her husband two years ago. Elle a épousé son conjoint il y a deux ans.

>> Will you marry me? Veux-tu m'épouser ?

@> marry [sb] (get married) verbe intransitif = se marier :

>> The two of them married two years ago. Les deux se sont mariés il y a deux ans.

@> marry [sb] (join as wife or husband) verbe transitif = marier/unir qqn à qqn :

>> The priest  married them in a beautiful ceremony. Le prêtre les a mariés/unis au cours d'une magnifique cérémonie.

@> marry [sb] (give for marriage] verbe transitif = marier qqn/donner qqn en mariage :

>> The father married his daughter to a doctor. Le père a marié/donné sa fille en mariage/ à un médecin.

[Ranio]

D'accord merci beaucoup !