Synthèse Seats and Forms of Power

[verlouisant]

Bonjour !

Je passe bientôt mon oral d'anglais et j'aimerais avoir un avis sur ma synthèse.

Merci d'avance.

SEATS AND FORMS OF POWER

 

     I am going to talk to you about the notion « Seats and Forms of Power ». Power is the ability to influence people's behaviour. Through this notion I'm going to talk about the Suffragettes, a group of women created in 1903. Their purpose is to get the vote for women. In 2015, a movie named Suffragettes came up in movie theatres. This movie, by way of some main characters, reconstruct the fight of Suffragettes in London in 1912 and everything it involve. What kind of power the Suffragettes use and fight for their purpose ? Where do they find their strength ? First, I'll talk about the powers they use and next I'll describe the powers they fight.

 

      First of all, I'll make a short presentation of the main character named Maud Watts. She's a mother and a wife. She lives with her husband and her son in a little house in a modest district of London. She belongs to the working class and she works at a laundry since she's 7. She becomes a Suffragette after she assisted of one of their violent demonstration and discovered that Violet who works at the laundry too, is one of them. By becoming one of them she meets women who have the same purpose : vote for women.

 

      To reach this ultimate goal, women have to confront power of men, of bosses, of the Police and of the Government.

 

      Even nowadays, men are often considered superior to women. In 1912, that superiority is not to contest. Men have a lot of rights that women don't have. Every night when she come back from work, she have to give all the money she earned to her husband. Moreover, when Maud become a Suffragette, her husband don't approve her choice and take her son away from her. So, she is without any home and far from her beloved son. And there is nothing she can do about it ! Beside all of these ordeals, she keeps fighting for vote for women. She doesn't give up

Bosses have also a non-debatable power in 1912. Indeed, Maud's boss is inappropriate with her and many other women. But, once again, there is nothing they can do about it, they need their job. But, one day, Maud have had enough of her boss' abuse so she burn his hand with a flatiron. And she keeps fighting for the rights of women !

The power of the Police and of the Government are the hardest to fight against for the Suffragettes. That's because the Police and the Government have a lot of power on the society and only the Government can give the vote for women. The Parliamentarians say that « Women should not exercise judgement in political affairs. If we allow women to vote, it will mean the loss of social structure ». Beside the Parliamentarians and men's opinion, Suffragettes keep fighting with demonstrations and violence. But these actions attract the press and the Police attention. So, the Government put a censorship in place and the Police are charged to stop and to eradicate Suffragettes violently. But even the power of the Government and the Police don't stop the Suffragettes.

 

      None power can stop Suffragettes to get the vote that they get in 1918. To succeed, they have to use forms of power too.

 

      Mrs Pankhurst, the leader of Suffragettes says « it's deeds, not words, that will give us the vote. » And their actions lead to fight for their rights were demonstrations, destructions (they set fire to a house), civil disobedience, propaganda (meetings, flyers, motto...) and suicide. As I said before, all these actions attract the press attention and publicity is exactly what Suffragettes need to alert the general public to their purpose. So they use the power of press to get close to their goal. But, the main form of power they use to reach their goal is their solidarity. Indeed, Suffragettes are a solid community and that's why they keep fighting until the end no matter what. In their community, there is solidarity between co-workers like Maud and Violets, there is solidarity beyond the social class ; indeed one of the Suffragettes belongs to the upper class. But the moment when they really feel solidarity is while speeches, especially the leader's speech. In the film, we can see all the Suffragettes more determined than ever and they are all standing up for the same purpose. Moreover, Maud and others Suffragettes help their leader to escape because the Police wants to arrest her. These women don't want to give up on the other women : this is the power of community.

 

      Suffragettes have a lot of powers to fight against like the power of men and of the Government. But they never surrender and they find other powers to use ! They use the press to change minds but they mostly use the power of each other, the power of their community, the power of solidarity. And thanks to their determination and their courage Maud and the Suffragettes succeeded to get the vote for women in Great Britain. And their success gave the power to fight for women's rights to many women all around the world.

[Jean B]

 

Bonjour,

Il y a 1 heure, verlouisant a dit :

Bonjour !

Je passe bientôt mon oral d'anglais et j'aimerais avoir un avis sur ma synthèse.

Merci d'avance.

SEATS AND FORMS OF POWER

 

     I am going to talk to you about the notion « Seats and Forms of Power ». Power is the ability to influence people's behaviour. Through this notion I'm going to talk about the Suffragettes, a group of women created in 1903. Their purpose is <Existent-elles encore ? was to get the right to vote for women. In 2015, a movie named Suffragettes came up in movie theatres. This movie, by way of some main characters, reconstructs <Le sujet est un singulier the fight of Suffragettes in London in 1912 and everything it involved.<Le récit se fait au prétérit. What kind of power did the Suffragettes use and fight for their purpose? Where do <Idem did they find their strength ? First, I'll talk about the powers they used <Encore ! and next I'll describe the powers they fight fought.<Et encore ! N'oublie quand même pas l'essentiel, à savoir que tu écris en anglais. Si le français s'accommode du présent dans un récit, ce n'est pas du tout le cas en anglais. Mémorise-le.

 

      First of all, I'll make a short presentation of the main character named Maud Watts. She's a mother and a wife. She lives with her husband and her son in a little house in a modest district of London. She belongs to the working class and she works at a laundry since she's been 7. <Le present perfect (has been) avec since puisqu'il y a lien passé/présent et surtout pas le présent. C'est de la grammaire élémentaire.  She becomes a Suffragette after she assisted of attended one of their violent demonstration and discovered that Violet who works at the laundry too, is one of them. <assist ne signifie pas assister à, attend si. By becoming one of them she meets women who have the same purpose: the right to vote for women.

 

      To reach this ultimate goal, women have to confront power of men, of bosses, of the Police and of the Government.

 

      Even nowadays, men are often considered superior to women. In 1912, that superiority is <1912 quand même ! Comment peux-tu employer un présent ? was not to be questioned / contested. À partir d'ici, rectifie toi-même, tu as de quoi faire ! >>> Men have a lot of rights that women don't have. Every night when she come back from work, she have to give all the money she earned to her husband. Moreover, when Maud become a Suffragette, her husband don't approve her choice and take her son away from her. So, she is without any home and far from her beloved son. And there is nothing she can do about it ! Beside In spite of all of these ordeals, she keeps fighting for the right to vote for women. She doesn't give up

Bosses have also a non-debatable power in 1912. Indeed, Maud's boss is inappropriate with her and many other women. But, once again, there is nothing they can do about it, they need their job. But, one day, Maud have had enough of her boss's abuse so she burn his hand with a flatiron. And she keeps fighting for the rights of women !

The power of the Police and of the Government are the hardest to fight against for the Suffragettes. That's because the Police and the Government have a lot of power on the society and only the Government can give grant women the right to vote. The Parliamentarians MPs (Members of Parliament) say that « Women should not exercise judgement in political affairs. If we allow women to vote, it will mean the loss of social structure ». Beside the Parliamentarians Despite MPs' and men's opinion, Suffragettes keep fighting with demonstrations and violence. But these actions attract the press and the Police attention. So, the Government put a censorship in place and the Police are charged to stop and (to) eradicate Suffragettes violently. But even the power of the Government and the Police don't stop the Suffragettes.

 

      None power can stop Suffragettes to get the vote that they get in 1918. To succeed, they have to use forms of power too.

 

      Mrs Pankhurst, the leader of Suffragettes says « it's deeds, not words, that will give us the vote. » And their actions lead to fight for their rights were demonstrations, destructions (they set fire to a house), civil disobedience, propaganda (meetings, flyers, motto...) and suicide. As I said before, all these actions attract the press attention and publicity is exactly what Suffragettes need to alert the general public opinion to their purpose. So they use the power of the press to get close to their goal. But, the main form of power they use to reach their goal is their solidarity. Indeed, Suffragettes are a solid community and that's why they keep fighting until the end no matter what. In their community, there is solidarity between co-workers like Maud and Violets, there is solidarity beyond the social class ; indeed one of the Suffragettes belongs to the upper class. But the moment when they really feel solidarity is while  during / in speeches, especially the leader's speech. In the film, we can see all the Suffragettes more determined than ever and they are all standing up for the same purpose. Moreover, Maud and others Suffragettes help their leader to escape because the Police wants to arrest her. These women don't want to give up on the other women: this is the power of community.

 

      Suffragettes have a lot of powers to fight against like the power of men and of the Government. But they never surrender and they find other powers to use ! They use the press to change minds but they mostly use the power of each other, the power of their community, the power of solidarity. And thanks to their determination and their courage Maud and the Suffragettes succeeded<Tiens, un prétérit enfin !  to get the vote for women in Great Britain. And their success gave the power to fight for women's rights to many women all around the world.

Dommage... Par ailleurs, quel sens donnes-tu à " beside " ? Tu commets ce faux-sens plusieurs fois. Vérifie dans ton dictionnaire.

[verlouisant]

Merci beaucoup, je ne comprend pas moi même pourquoi je n'ai pas mis du prétérit...

Il y a 14 heures, JRB a dit :

To reach this ultimate goal, women have to confront power of men, of bosses, of the Police and of the Government.

Par contre ici il faut que je mette "women had" non ?

Et dans ma présentation du personnage principal je n'ai pas besoin de mettre du prétérit ?

Et oui effectivement, le sens que je donnais à "beside" n'était pas le bon !

Encore merci d'avoir pris du temps.

[Jean B]

il y a une heure, verlouisant a dit :

Merci beaucoup, je ne comprends pas moi-même pourquoi je n'ai pas mis du prétérit...

Il y a 15 heures, JRB a dit :

To reach this ultimate goal, women have to confront power of men, of bosses, of the Police and of the Government.

Par contre ici il faut que je mette "women had" non ? Bien sûr puisque tu es toujours dans ton récit. C'est un oubli de ma part, nobody's perfect.

Et dans ma présentation du personnage principal je n'ai pas besoin de mettre du prétérit ? Non, pas nécessairement. C'est une façon de rendre vivant le personnage mais si tu veux vraiment être cohérente, le prétérit sera tout à fait correct.

Et oui effectivement, le sens que je donnais à "beside" n'était pas le bon ! D'où l'intérêt du dictionnaire.

Encore merci d'avoir pris du temps. My pleasure.