Correction De Fautes Et Explications

[Jelo]

Bonjour j'ai une expression écrite a faire pour vendredi : How necessary is to speak the language of the host country in order to be integrated?

je n'ai pas eu de soucis pour la faire mais je pense avoir fait des fautes pouvez vous m'expliquer et m'aider merci et bonne soirée! 

 

One day in your life you have to go abroad sometimes just for holidays but sometimes it’s because you want to live in this country. When you are in another country people don’t speak the same language as you , the can speak Spanish, English, polish or German.

How necessary is to speak the language of the host country in order to be integrated?

Imagine, you are an Immigrant and you are from Brazil and you came in France; but you don’t speak French, you understand a little. How can you be integrated? How can you have a job? Yes it’s difficult if you don’t speak the language of the host country . For example , my daddy is an Immigrant, a polish immigrant. When he come in France he don’t know just one French word and he speaks only polish with polish guy so no reason to learnt French language. But one day he met a girl (my mom) and fall in love with her, he learnt a few French word like : I love you, you are beautiful but he speaks only German with her not French. Many people in the street say ‘’look at this man he is a polish Immigrant , he don’t speak French why he stays here?’’ They judge him just only because he don’t speak French language. But people forget  the fact that learnt a new language is not easy, it’s easy for young people but when you are adult it more difficult. When my Dad speaks finally French , people stop judging and after this he get a job , get married have children .

In my view speak the language of the host country is necessary in order to be integrated. 

[Shiro]

Bonsoir,

 

Quelques fautes ou ce qu'il faudrait changer :

 

When he come in France he don’t know just one French word and he speaks only polish with polish guy so no reason to learnt French language

When he "came" ou "arrived" plutôt. He don't know just one French word... ça se dit pas !  He didn't know to say a single word in French.

 

and he speaks only polish with polish guy so no reason to learnt French language.   

And he talks only polish with his friends and there is no reason in learning French.

 

But one day he met a girl (my mom) and fall in love with her, he learnt a few French word like : I love you, you are beautiful but he speaks only German with her not French.

But one day, he met a girl, that girl was my mom, and he fall in love with her, he learnt a few words in French like : I love you, etc...  but he didn't speak French with her, only German.

 

Many people in the street say ‘’look at this man he is a polish Immigrant , he don’t speak French why he stays here?’

                                                                                                                    He doesn't !!!             why does

he don't : frequently used, but grammatically incorrect.

 

They judge him just only because he don’t speak French language.

He doesn't !! encore une fois

 

But people forget  the fact that learnt a new language is not easy,     

                                                 learning 

 

 it’s easy for young people but when you are adult it more difficult.

                                                                                it's

 

When my Dad speaks finally French , people stop judging and after this he get a job , get married have children .

When my Dad finally learned French, people stopped judging him and after that, he got job then he got married and had children.

 

J'espère t'avoir aidé ^^

 

 

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

 

Même si ma correction arrive trop tard, tâche d'en tirer parti sans qu'elle n'enlève rien à la bonne volonté de Shiro.

  Le 14/04/2015 à 16:15, Jelo a dit :

Bonjour,

J'ai une expression écrite a à faire pour vendredi : How necessary is it to speak the language of the host country in order to be integrated?

Je n'ai pas eu de soucis pour la faire mais je pense avoir fait des fautes. Pouvez-vous m'expliquer et m'aider ? Merci et bonne soirée! 

 

One day in your life you may have to go abroad sometimes just for holidays but sometimes it’s because you want to live in this country. <<Le modal may introduit la notion de probabilité car, sauf erreur de ma part, aller/vivre à l'étranger n'est pas obligatoire. When you are in another country people don’t speak the same language as you, they can speak Spanish, English, Polish or German.<<Tous les noms de langues vivantes/nationalités prennent une majuscule. Mémorise le.

How necessary is it to speak the language of the host country in order to be integrated?

Imagine, you are an immigrant and you are from Brazil, and you came in have come to France but you don’t speak French, you just understand it a little. How can you be integrated? How can you have a job? Yes it’s difficult if you don’t speak the language of the host country. For example my daddy is an immigrant, a Polish immigrant. When he come in came to France he don’t didn't know/couldn't speak just one word of  French, he speaks only spoke  polish  with polish  guys so that he had no reason to learnt learn the French language.<<Le récit d'événements passés, terminés, datés se fait obligatoirment au prétérit. De plus une révision sérieuse des verbes irréguliers ne sera pas superflue. But one day he met a girl (my mom) and fall fell in love with her, he learnt a few French words like : I love you, you are beautiful but he speaks only/mainly spoke German with her not French. Many people in the street say ‘’look at this man he is a polish  Immigrant, he don’t  speak French why does he stays stay here?’’<<Rappel tournure interrogative = do/does/did + sujet + base verbale They judge him just only because he don’t  speak French language. But people forget  the fact that learnt learning a new language is not easy, it’s easy for young people but when you are an adult it more difficult.<<Seul un gérondif (v-ing) peut prendre la fonction sujet d'un verbe. L'article indéfini a/an est obligatoire devant un nom concret attribut du sujet. When my dad speaks finally spoke French, people stop stopped judging him and after this he eventually get got a job, get got married have and had children .

In my view speak speaking the language of the host country is necessary in order to be integrated.