My Hero

[askk]

Bonjour,

J'ai un petite exposé en anglais, dont le sujet est : dite quels sont vos héros, pourquoi ce sont vos héros et pourquoi vous les admirez, interdiction de choisir un prsg fictif , j'ai choisi mon grand père et ma mère!( j'ai un peu inventé)

pour mon grand père:

My grandfather is my hero because he taught me to grow. He always told me that we should not do silly things. He saved me when I was in danger. He shared his love with everyone. He helped people when they needed it.

(est- ce que vous auriez pas quelques idées à me donner, s'il vous plait ?, je pense que ce n'est pas suffisant)

ma mère:

my mother is my hero because she always told me what to do and not do ..

this is a great mom, because when I is not moral, or when I'm sad, she is always there to make me laugh ..

She High my brothers and me. She has always loved me, even if I upset ..

(est- ce que vous auriez pas quelques idées à me donner, s'il vous plait ?, car je dois faire une minute pour chacun des personnages)

S'il vous plait, pouvez vous me corriger mes erreurs ? Merci beaucoup

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

pour mon grand père:

My grandfather is my hero because he taught me how to grow. He always told me that we should not do silly things. He saved me when I was in danger. He shared his love with everyone. He helped people when they needed it.

(est- ce que vous auriez pas quelques idées à me donner, s'il vous plait ?, je pense que ce n'est pas suffisant)

En te lisant, on a effectivement l'impression de feuilleter un catalogue. Ne peux-tu pas développer ?

ma mère:

My mother is my hero because she always told me what to do and not do ..

this She is a great mom because she is always there to make me laugh when I is not moral, am in low spirits or when I 'm feel sad,

Tu ne peux pas enchaîner 2 conjonctions (because/when) l'une à la suite de l'autre mais 2 propositions subordonnées, si.

Et s'il te plaît, oublie le traducteur automatique une bonne fois pour toutes.

She High <??? my brothers and me. She has always loved me, even if I am upset ..

(est- ce que vous auriez pas quelques idées à me donner, s'il vous plait ?, car je dois faire une minute pour chacun des personnages)

Et puis quoi encore ? Relis ma remarque sur ton premier texte.

[askk]

dsl :S, et je l'ai développé un peu plus :/, est ce que vous pouvez me corriger ?

pour la mère:

For me, my mother is my hero, because she always told me what to do and not to make.. It is not only the person who trained my attitude and my personality, but she also affects my education and my relation with the world around me. But chiefly, it is the person who knows me best. As guardian angel, her is always with me when I need her, but not only for me, she helps the people who need help, she thinks of the others and that's why I admire him(it) a lot she is a great mother, because she is always there to make me laugh when I, am in weak spirits or when I feel sad.

I know that, after all, my mother wants for me that he(it) ya of better. She(it) showed me the value of the kindness of the heart, the strength of the patience, the courage, the sacrifice.

pour le grand-père:

My grandfather, is my hero, because he is an ordinary person. When I was small, he walked me with my siblings, he bought all that we wanted. He has never disappointed my family and me. He makes everything so that I made a success my studies.

He is my hero because he taught me how to grow. He always told me that we should not do silly things. He saved me when I was in danger. He shared his love with everyone in my family. He helped people when they needed it. He is my hero because so much of what I am and know about being a person and living a life is because of him. My grandfather is my hero because he was a person who wanted to make the world better. I found it remarkable. He came to Turkey in 1990 for a better life. He did not know the language, and he came alone. He was not married. The things my grandfather did, influence me because they are very important in this life

merci beaucoup

[Jean B]

For To me my mother is my hero because she always told me what to do and not to make. - Pas de virgule devant because puisque c'est une conjonction de coordination.

- Inutile d'ajouter une faute là où elle n'existait pas. La répétition du second do est également inutile. It is not only the person who trained my attitude and my personality, but she also has an influence on / affects my education and my relation with the world around me. But chiefly, it is the person who knows me best. As a guardian angel, her is always with me when I need her, but not only for me, she helps the people who need help, she thinks of the others and that's why I admire him(it) a lot she is a great mother, because she is always there to make me laugh when I am in weak spirits or when I feel sad. <Tu as un réel et sérieux problème avec les pronoms sujet de la 3ème personne singulier. Inquiétant ! Je te laisse le soin de corriger ces horreurs partout où j'ai mis .

I know that after all my mother wants the best for me that he(it) ya of better. <Charabia ! She(it) showed me the value of the goodness / kindness of the her heart, the strength of the patience, the courage, the sacrifice.< Pas d'article défini devant un nom employé dans la généralité. C'est de la grammaire élémentaire. Je me demande où, quand et comment tu as appris l'anglais...

pour le grand-père:

My grandfather is my hero because he is an ordinary person. <N'abuse pas de la virgule ! Révise les règles de son emploi. When I was small, he walked me with my siblings, he bought all that we wanted. He has never disappointed my family and me. He makes did everything so that I made could make a success of my studies.< make et do ne sont pas interchangeables

He is my hero because he taught me how to grow. He always told me that we should not do silly things. He saved me when I was in danger. He shared his love with everyone in my family. He helped people when they needed it. He is my hero because so much of what I am and know about being a person and living a life is because of him. My grandfather is my hero because he was a person who wanted to make the world better. I found it remarkable. He came to from Turkey in 1990 for a better life. He did not know the language, and he came alone. He was not married. The things my grandfather did, influence me because they are very important in this my life

C'est quand même un peu plus étoffé.

[askk]

merci beaucoup