Besoin D'aide Pour Corriger Quelques Fautes

[Lebe-dein-leben]

Bonjour à tous, j'ai besoin d'aide pour corriger les éventuelles fautes que j'ai faites. Voici la description que j'ai écrite de la peinture ci-dessous:

The document dating from 1964 is a painting by the American artist Normal Rockwell, which the title is The Problem We All Live With.

In this painting we can see a little black girl who is at the center of the image. She is wearing a white dress, white sneakers and she has black hair braided. She is holding academic affairs. She is walking, she probably go to school.

Then we notice four men which we don't see the head. They are also walking beside the girl, propably to protect she. They are wearing uniforms with yellow armband and badge.

Then , we can see in the bottom right-hand corner a tomato crashed on the ground. She was surely crashed against the wall because we see a red splash. In addition it can be noted racist graffiti on the wall, probably for this little girl targeted by the tomato. But the little girl doesn't seem to be disturbed, indeed she is completely indifferent, because she must be surely accustomed to this kind of behavior.

Maybe the girl was attacked, maybe she did something wrong or maybe his parents can't come.We can imagine the girl is a victim of racism and the police are here to protect she.

This painting mostly derives its strengh and efficiency from the contrast between the white color that indicates innocence and the red color of tomato who refers violence and blood.

The painter wants to dramatize the situation. Norman Rockwell wanted to show the stupidity and injustice of racism.

I find this picture interesting, it delivers a message and calls for racial diversity in the country. I think it's essential to combat predjudice. Fortunately, men like Rockwell was there to protest segregation and thus to try to stop it. But today racism is still relevant.

Merci d'avance!

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

The document dating from 1964 is a painting by the American artist Norman Rockwell, which the its title is The Problem We All Live With.

In this painting we can see a little black girl who is at the center of the image. She is wearing a white dress, white sneakers and she has black braided hair. She is carrying/holding academic affairs her school things in her left hand. She is walking, she is probably going to school.

Then we notice four men which whose heads we doncan't see the head. They are also walking beside the girl, propably to protect she her. They are wearing a uniform with a yellow armband and a badge.

Then, we can see in the bottom right-hand corner a tomato crashed on the ground. She It was surely crashed against the wall because we see a red splash.< Ignorerais-tu qu'il existe 3 pronoms sujet différents (He/She/It) de la 3ème personne singulier ? Ignorerais-tu qu'il convient d'employer le pronom correspondant au GENRE du sujet ? In addition it can be noted we can notice racist graffiti on the wall, probably for this little girl who was targeted by the tomato. But the little girl doesn't seem to be disturbed, indeed she is completely indifferent, because she must be surely accustomed to this kind of behavior.

Maybe the girl was attacked, maybe she did something wrong or maybe his her parents can't come.< Contrairement au français, l'adjectif possessif doit être accordé en genre avec le POSSESSEUR. We can imagine the girl is a victim of racism and the police are here to protect she her. < Comment peux-tu encore confondre pronom sujet et pronom complément ?

This painting mostly derives its strengh and efficiency from the contrast between the white color that indicates innocence and the red color of tomato who which refers to violence and blood. < Idem pour les pronoms relatifs !

The painter wants to dramatize the situation. Norman Rockwell wanted to show the stupidity and injustice of racism.

I find think/believe this picture is interesting, it delivers a message and calls for racial diversity in the country. I think it's essential to combat predjudice. Fortunately, men a man like Rockwell was there to protest segregation and thus (to) try to stop it. < Il faut être logique ! Soit tu emploies le nom pluriel avec le verbe au pluriel (et pas au singulier !), soit tu emploies le nom singulier avec le verbe au singulier. Tu piges ? But today racism is still relevant.< Adjectif impropre dans le contexte. Qu'as-tu voulu dire exactement ?

Tu le sais sans doute, tu accumules des lacunes sur des points de grammaire élémentaire qu'il est anormal d'ignorer en Première. Fais ce qu'il faut pour vite les combler.

Bonne continuation.

[Lebe-dein-leben]

en effet j'ai fait des fautes d'inattention concernant les pronoms, merci pour ce corrigé

[Lebe-dein-leben]

et still relevant est la traduction que j'ai trouvé pour dire que le racisme est "encore d'actualité, encore présent" aujourd'hui, mais je n'étais pas sûr de cette traduction :/