jogy999 Posté(e) le 24 mars 2013 Signaler Posté(e) le 24 mars 2013 Bonjour, voilà je voulais savoir si vous pouviez m'aider à corriger mon texte ? Firstly "War" is a song recorded, apparead in 1976 and made popular by Bob Marley who was a Jamaican singer-songwriter and musician. He is considered by many generations as the spokesman deceased but privileged of disadvantaged. He is a hero, example and model one at a time. "Money" is a poem written by Benjamin Zephaniah, a Rastafarian writer and poet in 1992. On the one hand we are going to speak of similarities between the both texts and on the other hand of the differences. In both texts we are talking about the war. In fact we can say that "War" by Bob Marley is a consequence of "Money" of Zaphaniah: we do war because of money. I think we have the idea of revolution in the two texts, one denounces war and the other money, they encourage us to think and to act. The man is considered cruel and violent. In both texts, they want to make peace among all people despite differences in ethnicity, race, religion and so on and so on ... We find a common lexical field of social class and race like "big man" and "superior", "ruffian" and "inferior", "race" and "brother". The commonalities revolve around human relationships perverted by the power of money. Indeed money can make people happy if they can thanks to that to heal and feed themselves but at the same time money can make their unhappiness by perverting their reports, fanning their jealousies, and leading them to do war. The differences relate to the social and racial inequalities that also lead to war, and also money rivalries between the countries of the North and those of the South. In "Money" there are tensions because of the money whereas in "War" there are wars because of sociological and racial differences. In "War" there are good guys and bad guys (good and evil), while in "Money" is money especially evil. Man wants to take power to feel superior to others this is what shows us the Bob Marley's song even though in "Money" this is money that makes the man as he is and he has a good heart / deep down ? if there was not this whole economy. We could join "War" and "Money" to the "idea of progress" because they encourage us to reflect and act to do better in the future. We could also link them with the notion of "Space and Exchange" because they are both black man from different culture from ours that show us what they think. Thanks a lot ! : )
E-Bahut Jean B Posté(e) le 25 mars 2013 E-Bahut Signaler Posté(e) le 25 mars 2013 Bonjour, Le 24/03/2013 à 18:00, jogy999 a dit : Bonjour, Voilà je voulais savoir si vous pouviez m'aider à corriger mon texte. Firstly "War" is a song which was recorded apparead and released in 1976 and made popular by Bob Marley who was a Jamaican singer-songwriter and musician. He is considered by many generations as the spokesman, deceased yet/but privileged of under-privileged/handicapped/disadvantaged people. He is a hero, example and model one at a time. "Money" is a poem written in 1992 by Benjamin Zephaniah, a Rastafarian writer and poet. On the one hand we are going to speak of similarities between the both texts and on the other hand of their differences. In Both texts we are talking about the war. In fact we can say that "War" by Bob Marley is a consequence of "Money" of by Zaphaniah: we do make war because of money. I think we have the idea of revolution is present in the two texts: one denounces war and the other money, they encourage us to think and to act. The Man is considered cruel and violent. In both texts, they want to make peace among all people despite differences in ethnicity, race, religion and so on and so forth ... We find a common lexical field of social class and race like "big man" and "superior", "ruffian" and "inferior", "race" and "brother". The Commonalities revolve around human relationships perverted by the power of money. Indeed money can make people happy if, thanks to it, they can thanks to that to heal and feed themselves but at the same time money can make their unhappiness by perverting their reports relationships, fanning their jealousies, and leading them to do wage war against one another. <un modal est suivi d'une base verbale, toujours ! The differences relate to the social and racial inequalities that also lead to war, and also money rivalries between the northern and southern countries of the North and those of the South. In "Money" there are tensions because of the money whereas in "War" there are wars because of sociological and racial differences. In "War" there are good guys and bad guys (good and evil), while in "Money" money is especially evil. Man wants to take power to feel superior to others, this is what Bob Marley's song shows us even though in "Money" it is money that makes the man as he is and he has a good heart / deep down ? if there was not this whole economy. - pas d'inversion sujet-verbe en anglais - Je ne trouve aucun sens à cette dernière partie. We could join "War" and "Money" to the "idea of progress" because they encourage us to reflect and act to do better in the future. We could also link them with the notion of "Space and Exchange" because they are both black men from of different cultures from ours that show us what they think. Thanks a lot ! : )
jogy999 Posté(e) le 25 mars 2013 Auteur Signaler Posté(e) le 25 mars 2013 Bonjour, merci beaucoup pour la correction, je voulais juste vous demander, comment prononcer "wage " ? le "g" c'est comme "girafe" ou "gorille" ? Merci encore
E-Bahut Jean B Posté(e) le 25 mars 2013 E-Bahut Signaler Posté(e) le 25 mars 2013 Le 25/03/2013 à 10:34, jogy999 a dit : Bonjour, merci beaucoup pour la correction, je voulais juste vous demander, comment prononcer "wage " ? le "g" c'est comme "girafe" ou "gorille" ? Merci encore My pleasure.
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