Sujet d'expression écrite sur l'Amérique

[Sahel]

Bonsoir tous le monde,

Alors voilà j'ai un sujet d'expression écrite que j'ai commencée et j'aimerai avoir de l'aide pour le finir et/ou le corriger. ( P.s : il faut 250 mots)

Sujet : Do you personally think that America is still a "Promised Land" for young people today? Why? Why not?

Voici ce que j'ai fait :

More and more young poeple dream of moving to the United States and want to live the "American Dream". The reason for this is that they view it as being the land of opportunity. But is America still a "Promised Land" for the today's youth?

First of all, by going over there, most of the young people (look for ou seek?) to be free and to make a success of their lives(=réussir leurs vies?) . And it is true that the USA are a country recognized to be a country of freedom. We also say that there, there is the possibility to go from rags to riches. Indeed, there is no denying that it is far easier to start a business than it is most other countries because it is very easy to get money for the business. In fact, starting your own business is generally viewed as a good thing wich is not the case in most other countries. This is why we say that " US is the land of self-made man" .( 123 mots jusque là ) .

Nonetheless, for approximately 3 or 4 the years, "everything is not so pink"(=tout n'est pas si rose?) in the USA. Indeed, since the world economic crisis which especially affected the United States, some persons consider that the US is no longer a "land of opportunity"

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Merci d'avance

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

Sujet : Do you personally think that America is still a "Promised Land" for young people today? Why? Why not?

More and more young people dream of moving to the United States and want to live the "American Dream". The reason for this is that they view it as being the land of opportunity. But is America still a "Promised Land" for the today's youth?

First of all, by going over there, most of the young people (look for ou seek?) try / attempt to be free and to make a success of their lives. And it is true that the USA are is a country recognized to be a country land of freedom. We are also say told that there, there is everyone can have the possibility opportunity to go from rags to riches there. Indeed, there is no denying that it is far easier to start a business in America than it is in most other countries because it is very easy to get money for the business. In fact, starting your own business is generally viewed as a good thing, < virgule which is not the case in most other countries. This is why we say that " the USA is the land of self-made men".( 123 mots jusque là ).

Nonetheless, for approximately the past 3 or 4 the years, "everything is has not been so pink all roses in the USA. Indeed, since the start of the world economic crisis which especially affected the United States, some persons consider that the US is no longer a "land of opportunity".

[Sahel]

Ah d'accord, merci de m'avoir répondu et aussi vite hihi! Bonne soirée!

Est-ce que qqn aurait des idées pour moi pour ma 2e partie svp? en français ça me suffit! Merci