[Correction] Texte En Anglais

[Leslie_]

Bonsoir,

Je dois écrire un texte sur l'histoire du port d'armes en Amérique.

Voici mon texte :

Historically, bear a firearm was for the self-defense, againts American Indians, or any danger.

It was also to protect his family, his house from intruders.

It was important because the violence in society *ne cessa d'augmenter*, danger was everywhere !

But now, some people use this right for kill other people, for *commettre un délit*. It haven't got the same history now.

But there is more restrictions today, for bear a firearm, more details about the gun owner was collect, like *son casier judicaire*.

In the USA, 38500 people were killed by gun in 2004.

J'aimerais que l'on me corrige les fautes, ou que l'on me les indiques, svp.

Merci d'avance.

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[Jean B]

Bonjour,

  Le 11/03/2011 à 22:57, Leslie_ a dit :

Bonsoir,

Je dois écrire un texte sur l'histoire du port d'armes en Amérique.

Voici mon texte :

Historically, bear a firearm was for the self-defense, againts American Indians, or any danger.

[Leslie_]

Bonjour,

Merci de votre correction. Voici mon texte à présent :

  Citation

Historically, bearing a firearm was for the self-defense, againts American Indians, or any danger.

It was also to protect one's family, one's house, from intruders.

It was important because violence in society keep increasing, danger was everywhere !

But now, some people use this right to commit an offence, to kill people...

But there are more restrictions today, to bear a firearm, more details about the gun owner is collected, like the police record.

In the USA, 38500 people were killed by gun in 2004.

[Jean B]

  Le 12/03/2011 à 13:00, Leslie_ a dit :

Bonjour,

Merci de votre correction. Voici mon texte à présent :

Historically, bearing a firearm was for the self-defense, againts American Indians, or any danger.

[Leslie_]

Pardon.

  Citation

Historically, bearing a firearm was for self-defense, againts American Indians, or any danger.

It was also to protect one's family, one's house, from intruders.

It was important because violence in society kept increasing, danger was everywhere !

But now, some people use this right to commit an offence, to kill people...

But there are more restrictions today, to bear a firearm, more details about the gun owner are collected, like the police record.

In the USA, 38500 people were killed by gun in 2004.

[Jean B]

  Le 13/03/2011 à 09:56, Leslie_ a dit :

Pardon.

[Leslie_]

Merci JRB !