Victorian England

[Marabou]

Bonjour, c'est encore moi, la casse-pieds est de retour ! - Ca y est, c'est décidé je commence mes révisions du Bac, j'ai décidé de m'imposer un sujet par semaine, alors j'en ai fait un dont j'ai lu et travaillé le corrigé pour la compréhension de texte mais pourriez-vous corriger mon expression:

This text is more than a fictional narrative, it also allows us to understand the working of charities in Victorian England. Firstly there is an important element to observe, in fact we see that orphans are not left to their lives but they are collected and make them live in charities. But they are abused in these institutions, they eat very little, have no consideration and work enormously. They are exploited by the administration that runs these charities. In addition, they can be sold or abandoned at the slightest behavior consider as "intolerable"! We can therefore be using this text to understand the working of charities in Victorian England.

Merci de me corriger et surtout de m'expliquer mes erreurs !

Marabou !

[yveslouis]

Bonjour, c'est encore moi, la casse-pieds est de retour ! - Ca y est, c'est décidé je commence mes révisions du Bac, j'ai décidé de m'imposer un sujet par semaine, alors j'en ai fait un dont j'ai lu et travaillé le corrigé pour la compréhension de texte mais pourriez-vous corriger mon expression:

This text is more than a fictional narrative, it also allows us to understand the working of charities in Victorian England. Firstly there is an important element to observe, in fact we see that orphans are were (le présent de narration n'existe pas en anglais. Corrige partout où c'est nécessaire) not left to their lives but they are collected were gathered and make them live were given a living in charities. But they are abused in these institutions, they eat very little, have no consideration and work enormously. They are exploited by the administration that runs these charities. In addition, they can be sold or abandoned at the slightest behaviour considered as "intolerable"! We can therefore be using (???) this text to understand the working of charities in Victorian England.

Merci de me corriger et surtout de m'expliquer mes erreurs !

Marabou !

[Marabou]

Donc après corrections, ça donne:

This text is more than a fictional narrative, it also allows us to understand the working of charities in Victorian England. Firstly there is an important element to observe, in fact we see that orphans were not left to their lives but they were gathered and were given a living in charities. But they were abused in these institutions, they ate very little, had no consideration and worked enormously. They were exploited by the administration that ran these charities. In addition, they could be sold or abandoned at the slightest behaviour considered as "intolerable"! We can therefore use this text to understand the working of charities in Victorian England.

Is it OK? It is!

Thanks for your help! Say " thank you " to yveslouis!

Marabou !

[Marabou]

Me revoilà, pouvez-vous egalement la seconde question d'expressioné crite et c'est fini !

We have previously described the plight of orphans in Victorian England where they were not considered, exploited and suffered from lack of food. Let us compare today’s treatment of the poor and the women to what it was like, in England and here, some one hundred years ago

First, women a century ago were not allowed to vote, were dominated by their father and husband, by men in general because England as France were patriarchal societies. Gradually intellectuals women like George Sand or later Simone de Beauvoir have expressed their desire for independence and freedom. We can say that today women have a life much more comfortable there hundred years. But inequalities remain particularly regarding wages or female representation in politics. It is therefore important that women and intellectuals such as Elizabeth Badinter continue to protest for these rights !Now let's look at the plight of the poor for a century until today. A century ago they were not considered, today, all citizens including the poor have rights (right to housing, minimum wage ...). However the number of poor is still very important and many are homeless. This shows that the issue of solidarity with the poor is in France as in England far from resolved.

In conclusion, we can say that the condition of the poor and women has evolved over the past century, however, inequalities remain important and English as French societies are still very unequal.

Merci de votre aide !

Marabou !

[Marabou]

Je sais que je suis très impatiente, mais est-il possible de savoir si ma première correction est bonne et de me corriger le second paragraphe ?

Merci d'avance.

Marabou !

[Jean B]

Je sais que je suis très impatiente,

[Jean B]

Me revoilà. Pouvez-vous également corriger la seconde question d'expression écrite et c'est fini !

We have previously described the plight of orphans in Victorian England where they were not considered, were exploited and suffered from lack of food.

[Marabou]

Merci à JRB et à Yveslouis, nos supermen anglophones ! <Tant qu'à faire, utilise le pluriel anglais.

J'ai bûché la feuille sur les "The" et je pense que c'est mieux intégré, la pratique nous le dira !

En tout cas merci beaucoup, je pense continuer à faire des "sujets blancs" pour m'entraîner et pratiquer le plus possible d'ici juin. De plus, je pensais faire des "QCM" niveau bac où il faut trouver la bonne formulation ou trouver les erreurs afin de m'habituer à une relecture où "je traque" les fautes, qu'en pensez-vous ?

Merci en tout cas pour vos si précieux conseils !

Marabou !

[Jean B]

Merci à JRB et à Yveslouis, nos supermen anglophones ! <Tant qu'à faire, utilise le pluriel anglais.

J'ai bûché la feuille sur les "The" et je pense que c'est mieux intégré, la pratique nous le dira !