Correction Please

[Cnédienne]

Bonjour,

Quelqu'un peut-il me corriger ces deux exercices s'il vous plait?

Merci beaucoup.

EXERCICE 1:

Complétez le texte suivant en mettant les verbes entre parenthèses au prétérit ou au plus-que-parfait

(simple ou en be +-ing) :

The first time Dunbar came to the village was back last summer. He had found a wounded woman by the river. She had a bad wound on the side of her head and since he (can, not) revive her he (decide) it (be) better to take her back to the village. At that time he (feel) very lonely. He (hear, not) from his commander for months and he no longer (know) what he (do) there. Previously, when the commander (offer) him to keep the outpost at the frontier he (see) it as an opportunity to be alone with his own thoughts.

However, soon the solitude of his life (become) inhuman and only the daily visit of the wolf (take) him away from madness. But, now that he (come) to know the Indians he (know) that he (belong) there, in the Prairie.

The first time Dunbar came to the village was back last summer. He had found a wounded woman by the river. She had a bad wound on the side of her head and since he could not revive her he decided it was better to take her back to the village. At that time he had felt very lonely. He had not heard from his commander for months and he no longer knew what he Was doing there. Previously, when the commander had offer him to keep the outpost at the frontier he saw it as an opportunity to be alone with his own thoughts.

However, soon the solitude of his life had became inhuman and only the daily visit of the wolf had taken him away from madness. But, now that he was coming to know the Indians he knows that he belonged there, in the Prairie.

EXERCICE 2:

Traduisez les phrases suivantes en français.

1. Once the dust had settled, Dunbar could see that the warriors had prepared themselves for an attack.

2. The white man had dismounted and now stood still. The Indians decided that he must be a crazy man.

3. He could have left then but he didn’t move and waited knowing that death would come soon.

1. Dès que la poussière disparut, Dunbar vit que les guerriers s'étaient préaprés a attaquer.

2. L'homme blanc était descendu de cheval et regardait autoure de lui. Les Indiens pensèrent que c'était un homme fou.

3. Il aurait pu partir mais il en bougea pas et attendit, sachant que la mort pourrait bientôt arriver.

EXERCICE 3:

Traduisez les phrases suivantes en anglais.

4. Comme il avançait vers eux, il vit l’un des guerriers qui s’était détaché des autres, venir vers lui.

5. Il avait dû croire qu’ils l’accueilleraient comme un ami.

6. Il se pouvait que ce fut son dernier jour.

1. As he was going to them, he saw that one of the warriors was coming to him.

2. He may have thought that they would welcome him like a friend.

3. Maybe it could have been his last day.

[yveslouis]

  Cnédienne a dit :

Bonjour,

Quelqu'un peut-il me corriger ces deux exercices s'il vous plait?

Merci beaucoup.

EXERCICE 1:

Complétez le texte suivant en mettant les verbes entre parenthèses au prétérit ou au plus-que-parfait

(simple ou en be +-ing) :

The first time Dunbar came to the village was back last summer. He had found a wounded woman by the river. She had a bad wound on the side of her head and since he (can, not) revive her he (decide) it (be) better to take her back to the village. At that time he (feel) very lonely. He (hear, not) from his commander for months and he no longer (know) what he (do) there. Previously, when the commander (offer) him to keep the outpost at the frontier he (see) it as an opportunity to be alone with his own thoughts.

However, soon the solitude of his life (become) inhuman and only the daily visit of the wolf (take) him away from madness. But, now that he (come) to know the Indians he (know) that he (belong) there, in the Prairie.

The first time Dunbar came to the village was back last summer. He had found a wounded woman by the river. She had a bad wound on the side of her head and since he could not OK revive her he decided it was better to take her back to the village. At that time he had felt was feeling very lonely. He had not heard from his commander for months and he no longer knew what he was doing there. Previously, when the commander had offerED him to keep the outpost at the frontier he saw had seen it as an opportunity to be alone with his own thoughts.

However, soon the solitude of his life had becOme inhuman and only the daily visit of the wolf had taken him away from madness. But, now that he was coming to know the Indians he knows knew that he belonged there, in the Prairie.

EXERCICE 2:

Traduisez les phrases suivantes en français.

1. Once the dust had settled, Dunbar could see that the warriors had prepared themselves for an attack.

2. The white man had dismounted and now stood still. The Indians decided that he must be a crazy man.

3. He could have left then but he didn’t move and waited knowing that death would come soon.

1. <Dès> Après que la poussière ait disparu<t>, Dunbar vit que les guerriers s'étaient préparés a attaquer.

2. L'homme blanc était descendu de cheval et <regardait autour de lui> se tenait maintenant immobile. Les Indiens pensèrent qu<e c'était un homme>'il était fou.

3. Il aurait pu partir mais il <en> ne bougea pas et attendit, sachant que la mort <pourrait> arriverait bientôt <arriver>.

EXERCICE 3:

Traduisez les phrases suivantes en anglais.

4. Comme il avançait vers eux, il vit l’un des guerriers qui s’était détaché des autres, venir vers lui.

5. Il avait dû croire qu’ils l’accueilleraient comme un ami.

6. Il se pouvait que ce fut son dernier jour.

1. As he was going to them, he saw <that> one of the warriors who had broken away from the others <was> coming to him.

2. He <may> MUST have thought that they would welcome him like a friend.

3. <Maybe it could have been> It might be his last day.

[Cnédienne]

Merci,

tu pourrais aussi me corriger cela?

A New Kind of Warrior

When I got back to the reservation, my family wasn’t surprised to see me. They’d been expecting me back since the day I left for Seattle. There’s an old Indian poet who said that Indians can reside in the city, but they can never live there. That’s as close to truth as any of us get. Mostly I watched television. For weeks I flipped through channels, searched for answers in the game shows and soap operas. My mother would circle the want ads in red and hand the paper to me.

“What are you going to do with the rest of your life?” she asked,

“Don’t know, ”I said, and normally, for almost any other Indian in the country, that would have been a perfectly fine answer. But I was special, a former college student, a smart kid. I was one of those Indians who was supposed to make it, to rise above the rest of the reservation like *a fucking eagle or something, I was the new kind of warrior.

For a few months, I didn’t even look at the ads my mother circled. I just left the newspaper where she had set it down. After a while though, I got tired of television and started to play basketball again. I’d been a good player in high school, nearly great, and almost played at the college I *attended for a couple of years. But I’d been too *out of shape from drinking and sadness to ever be good again. Still, I liked the way the ball felt in my hands and the way my feet felt inside my shoes. At first I just *shot baskets by myself. It was selfish, and I also wanted to learn the game against anybody else. Since I’d been good before and embarrassed tribal members, I knew they would take revenge on me. Forget about the cowboys versus Indians business. The most intense competition on any reservation was Indians versus Indians.

A. Sherman, The Lone Ranger and Tonton Fistfight in Heaven, 1994

Answer the following questions

a) General comprehension

1. What is the nature of the text? It is an extract from a novel called The Lone Ranger and Tonton Fistfight in Heaven, and writed by A Sherman.

2. Fill in the blanks of the summary, taking words from the text.

The narrator is a young INDIAN who is returning to his RESERVATION .after having resided in Seattle. At first he falls into apathy and only watches TELEVISION without even reading the ADS of the newspaper to find a job. However, he begins to practice BASKETBALL again and gets ready to play with other Indians.

b) Back home

4. What was the narrator’s family reaction on his return? Where is an Indian’s real place, (quote to justify your answer)

The Narrator's family wasn't surprised. An Indian's real place is his reservation. “When I got back to the reservation, my family wasn’t surprised to see me.” l1. “There’s an old Indian poet who said that Indians can reside in the city, but they can never live there.”l2.

5. How do we see that at first he is depressed?

We see that at first the narrator was depressed because he always watched television. “For weeks I flipped through channels, searched for answers in the game shows and soap operas.” l3

6. How did his mother express her concern for him?

She looks after a job for him. “My mother would circle the want ads in red and hand the paper to me.” l4

c) A new kind of warrior

7. From the information in the text, say what characterised the narrator as a child and relate his life up to now.

First, we know that the narrator is a child because he says that he is a college student, and a kid: “But I was special, a former college student, a smart kid.” l7. It seems that the narrator, had go to Seattle searching a job or maybe a college where to study, and after, he is returned to the reservation.

8. Explain the choice of the image of the eagle and the shocking juxtaposition of “fucking” and “eagle”.

For the indians, the eagle is a symbol of greatness, and many of them are called “white eagle”, “great eagle”... So, we can say that the eagle is important in the indian's culture.

In this text, there is a juxtaposition between two words: “fucking” and “eagle”, we can say that in that way, the narrator express his feelings: he is angry because he have to “make it, to rise above the rest of the reservation”. The intention of the author, using this expression is to shock the reader, so that he could understant the narrator's feelings.

9. Explain the notion “a new kind of warrior”.

In history, during many years, there were fights between Indians and white mens. The Indians, were called warriors, that's why in the text, the author use the notion “a new kind of warrior”.

Using these words, the authors is trying to make us understand that before, Indians warriors only fight against white men, and know, the new indians, like the narrator, fight not just to defend themselfs from white men, but trying to had a better life than they ancestors, in Sherman's words “to make it”.

The new war is not against white men, but to get a better life, and a good education, and to “make it”.

[Cnédienne]

S'il vous plait aidez moi.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

C'est du bon travail dans l'ensemble et tu as bien compris le texte, à un détail près. Good luck.

Answer the following questions

a) General comprehension

1. What is the nature of the text? It is an extract from a novel called The Lone Ranger and Tonton Fistfight in Heaven, and written by A Sherman. OK<Mais révise tes verbes irréguliers. Il faut les connaître par coeur et sans faille.

2. Fill in the blanks of the summary, taking words from the text.

The narrator is a young INDIAN who is returning to his RESERVATION .after having resided in Seattle. At first he falls into apathy and only watches TELEVISION without even reading the ADS of the newspaper to find a job. However, he begins to practice BASKETBALL again and gets ready to play with other Indians. OK

b) Back home

4. What was the narrator's family reaction on his return? Where is an Indian's real place, (quote to justify your answer)

The Narrator's family wasn't surprised. An Indian's real place is his reservation. "When I got back to the reservation, my family wasn't surprised to see me." l1. "There's an old Indian poet who said that Indians can reside in the city, but they can never live there."l2. OK

5. How do we see that at first he is depressed?

We see that at first the narrator was depressed because he always watched television. "For weeks I flipped through channels, searched for answers in the game shows and soap operas." l3 OK Peut-être pourrais-tu ajouter qu'il ne regardait même pas les petites annonces d'emploi que sa mère entourait de rouge sur les journaux ?

6. How did his mother express her concern for him?

She tried to help him find a job. "My mother would circle the want ads in red and hand the paper to me." l4 OK

c) A new kind of warrior

7. From the information in the text, say what characterised the narrator as a child and relate his life up to now.

<First, we know that the narrator is a child because he says that he is a college student, and a kid: "But I was special, a former college student, a smart kid." l7. It seems that the narrator, had go to Seattle searching a job or maybe a college where to study, and after, he is returned to the reservation>. Non là, tu es complètement à côté de la plaque. « A smart kid » ne signifie pas que c'est un enfant. Lorsqu'il revient de Seattle dans la réserve indienne, il rentre de l'université, c'est un jeune homme. On peut donc déduire qu'il a d'abord été au lycée, puis à l'université dont il est probablement diplômé. « A smart kid » = un jeune (homme) intelligent. Tu piges ? Retrouve donc les indices dans le texte pour rédiger ta réponse.

8. Explain the choice of the image of the eagle and the shocking juxtaposition of "fucking" and "eagle".

For the Indians, the eagle is a symbol of greatness, and many of them are called "white eagle", "great eagle"... So, we can say that the eagle is important in the Indians' culture.

In this text, there is a juxtaposition between two words: "fucking" and "eagle", we can say that in that way, the narrator expresses his feelings: he is angry because he has to "make it, to rise above the rest of the reservation". The intention of the author, using this expression is to shock the reader, so that he can understant the narrator's feelings. OK

Concernant l'aigle, peut-être pourrais-tu ajouter que c'est aussi l'emblème des Etats-Unis ? Ce qui est d'autant plus choquant de l'accoler à « fucking ».

9. Explain the notion "a new kind of warrior".

In history, during many years, there were fights between Indians and white men. The Indians, were called warriors, that's why in the text, the author uses the notion "a new kind of warrior".

Using these words, the authors is trying to make us understand that before, Indian warriors only fought against white men, and now, the new Indians, like the narrator, fight not just to defend themselves from white men, but try to have a better life than their ancestors, in Sherman's words "to make it".

The new war is not against white men, but to get a better life, and a good education, and to "make it". OK Peut-être pourrais-tu insister que c'est d'autant plus difficile pour eux de « to make it » qu'ils sont précisément indiens.

[Cnédienne]

Merci beaucoup JRB, mais tu ne pourrais pas me donner des indices pour la question 7 s'il te plait?

je suis vraiment pommée.

PLEASE

[Cnédienne]

Tu ne pourrais pas aussi m'aider pour cette question s'il te plait?

d) The importance of sport

10. Explain the attraction of basketball for the narrator and the repercussion of his past victories. Why are sporting competitions

so important for young people? Answer taking the example of the text and other examples that you know of.

Write up to 120 words.

Merci, tu es un ange

[Cnédienne]

OH eh, ya personne qui peut m'aider s'il vous plait?

[yveslouis]

Message effacé. (double emploi)

[yveslouis]

Je ne trouve pas, dans le texte, de renseignements sur la jeunesse du héros. Désolé !

Quant à ta dernière question, je pense que tu es à même d'apporter une réponse circonstanciée. Je te résume la question :

Explique pourquoi le narrateur est attiré par le basket-ball et les répercussions de ses victoires passées. Pourquoi les compétitions sportives sont-elles si importantes pour les jeunes ? Cite l'exemple du texte et ceux que tu connais.

Voici un peu d'aide pour la rédaction :

Conseils : Ne fais pas de phrases trop longues. Deux propositions suffisent amplement. Essaye de "penser" en anglais. Mets quelques mots, qui seront un mini plan, sur une feuille de papier, puis rédige en anglais.

MOTS DE LIAISON :

to begin with = pour commencer

then = puis

besides/moreover = de plus

thus = ainsi

therefore = en conséquence

finally = enfin

in short = bref,..

all things considered = tout compte fait

to recap = en résumé

to conclude / in conclusion = pour conclure

I'd say that = je dirais que

it seems to me that = il me semble que

as for = quant à

according to = d'après (quelqu'un d'autre que moi)

to my mind = à mon avis

how can I put it = comment dire...

mind you (familier) = remarquez...

what I mean is that = ce que je veux dire, c'est que

the point is (that) = le fait est que

in other words = autrement dit

that is to say = c'est-à-dire

actually = en réalité, en fait

in fact = en fait

in a way = en un sens

to a certain extent = dans une certaine mesure

anyway = en tous cas

as a rule = en règle générale

generally speaking = en général

on the whole = dans l'ensemble

on the one hand = d'une part / d'un côté

on the other hand = d'autre part / d'un autre côté

still = quand même / tout de même

yet = pourtant

however = cependant

on the contrary = au contraire

in spite of = en dépit de / malgré

by the way = au fait...

that reminds me = ça me fait penser......

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first / firstly = d'abord

next / after that = après celà

Secondly =en second lieu

also / too / as well = aussi/également

neither...nor = ni...ni

indeed = en effet

in fact/ as a matter of fact/actually = en fait

of course/ naturally/ (quite) obviously = bien sûr/ évidemment

OPPOSITION :

but = mais

nevertheless. however = cependant, toutefois

yet = pourtant

on the contrary = au contraire

on the other hand = en revanche

On the one hand...on the other hand = d'une part...d'autre part

(al)though = bien que

in spite of/ despite = malgré/ en dépit de

whereas/ while = alors que/ tandis que

CONDITION:

If/ provided/providing (that) = si/ à condition que

supposing = à supposer que

in case = au cas où

even if = même si

except if/ unless = à moins que

TIME:

When = quand/lorsque

while = pendant que

whenever = chaque fois que

before = avant que

after = après que

since = depuis que

till. until = jusqu'à ce que

as soon as = dès que

as long as = tant que

meanwhile/ in the meantime = en attendant/ entretemps

PURPOSE : (but)

(in order) to/ so as to = afin de

with a view to = dans l'intention de

in order that/ so that = afin que/ de sorte que

CAUSE :

because = parce que

as = comme

since = puisque

for = car

because of/ owing to/ due to = à cause de/ en raison de

thanks to = grâce à

what... for = pourquoi/ dans quel but ?

CONSEQUENCE:

so/ thus = donc/ ainsi

therefore/ accordingly/ consequently = par conséquent

hence = d'où

thereby/ as a result (of which) = de ce fait

so/such...that = si/ tellement que

so that = de telle sorte que

CONCLUSION:

in short/ in brief/ in a word/ to sum up = en un mot/ en résumé

eventually = à la fin

last (of all)/ lastly/ in the end/ finally = enfin/ en dernier lieu

in conclusion/ to conclude = en conclusion

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[Cnédienne]

Pfiou eh ben dis donc.

Merci anglais,

j'écris quelque chose et demain ou après je reviendrais surement

Merci encore pour ton aide

a plus

[Cnédienne]

Bonjour,

Voila, quelqu'un peut me corriger? Merci

7. From the information in the text, say what characterised the narrator as a child and relate his life up to now.

When he got back to the Reservation, the narrator is coming from the university of Seattle, he is a young man. We know that he went to high school when he says: “I'd been a good player in high school, nearly great, and almost played at the college...” L10-11

We can deduce from this, that the narrator had first go to the college, and after to high school, where he was probably a good student “But I was special, a former college student, a smart kid”

So, we can say that at that moment, the narrator was a child, and know, he is probably an adult, and he relate his life.

10. Explain the attraction of basketball for the narrator and the repercussion of his past victories. Why are sporting competitions

so important for young people? Answer taking the example of the text and other examples that you know of.

Write up to 120 words.

When the narrator was younger, he used to play basketball, he was “ a good player in high school”.

Moreover, we know from the text, that when he got tired of television, he started to play agin, that show us how the basketball is important for the narrator, it's for him, a way to got waay from his problems.

He first plays alone, but at last, he wanted to play against anybody else, because he wanted to improve his game, and because he know that playing against anybody, he would manage to love this game more than he does know, and also, that he would shows people that he can do something really important, that he is able to make it.

When I read this story, that remenber me black young people in America, they start playing basketball. WHY? Maybe because they want to forget they poverty, or maybe it is to struggle racial discrimination.

In this story for example, maybe the narrator plays basketball to show that, even being an Indian, he can play well, and maybe, be one day, one of the better in the world.

Let's remember that one of the best basketball players in the world is a black man: Mickael Jordan.

(206 words)

11.Write “A New Kind of Warrior” from the mother’s point of view, using the first person narrative : she could see her boy come back, lazy and dejected. She thought of his childhood and wondered why. (250 mots)

She wasn't really surprised when she saw her boy coming back to the reservation.

But she felt sad, sad to see him returning lazy and dejected. Sad to see him passing day after day watching television, lying postrated on his chair.

Everyday she circled the want ads in red and hand the paper to him. She knows that he didn't even take a look at them, but that makes her feel better, in that way, she thought she was helping him.

She always ask him what he was going to do with the rest of his life,and always get the same answer “don't know”.

How many times does she asked herself “why?”, “why does he came back?”, he got a good childhood, a good education.

And now...now he is there, like any other indian in the reservation, but she knows that it was not really his futur, he was a smart kid, he went to college, to high school, plays basketball...

No, her boy was not like any other indian, he's got a good futur, and she knows it!

She still remember when he started to play basketball at college. He was so good at this sport!

Why the white men are so racist?She knows why her boy has come back to the reservation, yes she knows it: because he is an Indian, and because he would not have a good futur because of the racial segragation, even being a smart kid!

Then he start plays basketball again, at first just shoting baskets by himself, but at last, he wanted to play against other indians. He was a very good player. And her mother was proud of him. (280 words)

MERCI

[Jean B]

  Cnédienne a dit :

Bonjour,

Voila, quelqu'un peut me corriger? Merci

7. From the information in the text, say what characterised the narrator as a child and relate his life up to now.

When he got back to the Reservation, the narrator <is> was coming from the university of Seattle, he is a young man. We know that he went to high school when he says: "I'd been a good player in high school, nearly great, and almost played at the college..." L10-11

We can deduce from this, that the narrator had first <go> attended high school <to the> then college <and after to high school> where he was probably a good student "But I was special, a former college student, a smart kid".

[So, we can say that at that moment, the narrator was a child, and now, he is probably an adult, and he relates his life.]<Phrase à revoir à la lumière de la remarque suivante.

=> Attention aux appellations anglaises : high school = lycée // college = faculté de l'université.

10. Explain the attraction of basketball for the narrator and the repercussion of his past victories. Why are sporting competitions so important for young people? Answer taking the example of the text and other examples that you know of.

Write up to 120 words.

When the narrator was younger, he used to play basketball, he was " a good player in high school".

Moreover, we know from the text, that when he got tired of television, he started to play again, <that> which shows us how <the> basketball is important for the narrator, it's for him, a way to get away from his problems.

At first he <first> played alone, but at last, he wanted to play against anybody else, because he wanted to improve his game, and because he knew that playing against anybody, he would manage to love this game more than he did now, and also, that he would show<s> people that he could do something really important, that he was able to make it.

When I read this story, <that> it <remenber> reminds me <black> young black people in America, they start playing basketball. Why? Maybe because they want to forget their poverty, or maybe <it is> to struggle against racial discrimination.

In this story for example, maybe the narrator plays basketball to show that, even being an Indian, he can play well, and may <be,> be one day one of the <better> best players in the world.

Let's remember that one of the best basketball players in the world is a black man: Mickael Jordan.

(206 words)

11.Write "A New Kind of Warrior" from the mother's point of view, using the first person narrative : she could see her boy come back, lazy and dejected. She thought of his childhood and wondered why. (250 mots)

She wasn't really surprised when she saw her boy coming back to the reservation.

But she felt sad, sad to see him returning lazy and dejected. Sad to see him <passing> spending day after day watching television, lying postrated on his chair.

Everyday she circled the want ads in red and handed the paper to him. She knew that he didn't even take a look at them, but that made her feel better, in that way, she thought she was helping him.

She always asked him what he was going to do with the rest of his life, and always got the same answer "don't know".

How many times did she ask herself "why?", "why did he come back?", he got a good childhood, a good education.

And now...now he is there, like any other Indian in the reservation, but she knew that it was not really his future, he was a smart kid, he <went > had been to high school, to college, played basketball...

No, her boy was not like any other Indian, he<'s> had got a good future, and she knew it!

She still remembered when he started <to> playing basketball at high school <college>. He was so good at this sport!

Why are <the> white men <are> so racist? She knew why her boy had come back to the reservation, yes she knew it: because he was an Indian, and because he would not have a good future because of the racial segregation, even being a smart kid!

Then he started playing basketball again, at first just shooting baskets by himself, but at last, he wanted to play against other Indians. He was a very good player. And her mother was proud of him. (280 words)

=> Bien que je te l'aie corrigé, tu dois refaire cet exercice car tu n'as tenu aucun compte de la consigne. On te demande d'écrire "A New Kind of Warrior" du point de vue de la mère en utilisant la première personne, ce que tu n'as pas fait.

Par ailleurs, tu as intérêt à revoir tout ce qui concerne la concordance des temps au passé.

Tu n'as qu'à voir le nombre de rectifications que j'ai apportées, c'est frappant.

Révise aussi les verbes irréguliers, il faut les connaître parfaitement.

MERCI